I really struggled with this task as I was unsure of the style of writing to use, or the intended reader. In line with the required task I have rewritten my CV (which I previously posted on Google Docs), and hopefully improved upon its quality by choosing the style I felt most comfortable with and one I thought would best fit my Biog.
I hope that it is now a passionate, personal and inspiring profile as opposed to the clinical, concise and factual document it currently is.
Any feedback or opinions would be greatly appreciated and welcomed. Is it too long, conversational, does it achieve the above goals, how did you feel reading it. Please feel free to give me both barrels, don’t hold back, as things can only get better (I keep telling myself). Thank you in advance for taking the time to read this.
(I even figure out how to rename the link...i think...if it works that is).
(I checked it and it works - WOOHOO!)
Hi Phil,
ReplyDeleteyaaaay it worked :D
Really enjoyed reading this and getting to know a bit about you, but i feel this is more of a personal biography then a CV.
I feel on a CV people want to find out as much as they can about you in the shortest time, so its better to keep all your information quite short.
I think to improve this you may need to condence what you've written.
Well done though, look forward to meeting you,
Effie x
Hi Phil! This is a great professional profile! May I make a few suggestions?
ReplyDelete- Leave out your personal life (People/employers might take advantage of some of the things you've mentioned)
- And as Effie said keep your info short
Other than that, all I can say is The Moonlite Players would snap you up!
See you on the Eighteenth.
Lily
:D
Hi Phil,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading this. I thought the tone was humorous with a dry wit which obviously reflects your personality. At the same time you have an evident determination to succeed with apparently the ideal combination of cheek and charm! (re Scholarship)
I thought your paragraph on the internal conflict experienced at dance college was well-described and something that probably all of us who have attended can relate to...the fine balance of applying self-criticism without destroying self-confidence.
I think it meets your target as outlined above. If you see my effort you will realise that I, too, struggled to get a 'happy medium' as far as professionalism and personality was concerned. I think you would do well to keep this as it is a lovely insight into your life and character, but if you wanted something more professional you could do a more 'clinical, concise and factual' one as well, and have that alongside your CV.